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New Discoveries about Maya Civilization: Perfect timing for my next editing project

Way back in 2013 I managed to write an entire 1st draft during NaNoWriMo. I call it The Vern after an important religious figure in the book. The setting is inspired by the Maya, but I made up all the religious ceremonies etc based on another idea I had even longer ago. Anyway, the setting, temples, food, clothing, and architecture is all Maya-inspired.

I’ve recently decided this will be the next project I focus on after I finish writing Skyfall because the first draft is complete. The book I started writing during NaNo 2016 isn’t finished yet, so I decided to hold off on that one. My goal–and a steep one–will be to revise it by the end of the year. This is probably overly ambitious, but I can try.

So, when I heard on the radio that archeologists have discovered that the Maya civilization is much more extensive in area and dense in population than previously thought, I figured it was a sign I’d chosen the correct project to work on next. This is so exciting for me because what I’ve imagined for my book is actually closer to reality than I expected. I had to fudge some stuff (it’s fantasy, remember) to create the feeling I wanted for the setting, but now I’ll be closer to the truth which is always nice. The big discoveries I’m most interested in are:

  • denser population (3-4x what they thought), possibly 10 million people
  • cities connected by raised causeways! for trade and travel
  • massive farming and irrigation operations
  •  more interconnected fortifications and other evidence of war than they thought and from before they thought

All of this will help define the world of The Vern when I go back and start revising. I’m really hoping to focus on my setting this next draft and all this will help. I’m pretty good at societal structures and history in my world-building, but the actual physical details are more difficult for me.

 

Writing, Distractions, Brainstorming and more!

Alas! It has been a long time since I updated this space. I primarily blame searching for and landing a new job and the process of selling my condo, buying a townhouse and moving.

Other things that have happened since I last posted…

  1. I did successfully complete NaNo16 in word count. The book still needs an ending.
  2. I successfully completed a Whole30. It literally took over my life—soooo much cooking!—but even now, months after I finished, I’m trying to generally (sometimes very generally) to keep to the template.
  3.  Went on vacation to Grand Tetons and Yellowstone, which inspired me to set one of my books in that general region.
  4. Successfully completed a 40 hour goal in July for Camp NaNoWriMo, working on #5 and #6 below.
  5. Thought of a way to revamp my very first novel into something much less derivative (gravity magic a death sentence! Small country surrounded and constantly at war! Society/government contains no kings or princes, but a delicate system of checks and balances between military, forge magic (w/health benefits), and legislature. Physical setting see #3!). Same characters–Marla, Russ & Nat–with similar backgrounds and goals. I’m currently brainstorming.
  6. Finished my (hopefully!) last big revision for Dakotashi. I changed the beginning around. Now, I’m polishing/editing and getting it ready to query again.

My self-imposed deadline to finish polishing Dakotashi and get it out there is the end of September. My drop-dead deadline is to do that by the beginning of NaNoWriMo 2017.

When you read that NaNo novel you wrote two years ago for the first time…

I’ve started rereading The Vern (not the real title) one of my NaNo projects from 2013, the year I went insane and racked up 130,000 words in 30 days. I’m looking at it for a couple of reasons:

  1. I need something else (other than Autocrit) to focus on while my queries for Dakotashi One are out there in agent-land (I don’t have anything at the right stage to start writing).
  2. If I go through all the agents who represent fantasy that I can find and none bite on Dakotashi, I’ll need something else to send them.
  3. The Vern fits some of the wish-list criteria I’ve seen: multicultural, non-European setting.
  4. It’s a cool story/setting/characters that I definitely wanted to get back to anyway at some point.

It’s a weird experience. It’s both better and worse than I thought. I don’t remember all that happens, so I’m enjoying the story and characters, but I also notice all these things that need to be worked on. Everything needs to be tightened, of course—NaNo right? But while so far I think the plot & characters are good, I’m narrating/telling way too much. The characters are on a journey so there a lot of jumping around (to avoid unending travel through rainforests where nothing happens), but the scenes are too short (because of the narration/telling) to really ground the reader before jumping again. So I’ll need to find ways to be more present in the moment and expand the scenes without focusing too much on mundane journey stuff that doesn’t really matter.

I also discovered that one of my main characters reminds me of Dakotashi in that she has a rich & violent backstory. I have been thinking recently about how while I love flashbacks on TV, I tend to dislike them when I’m reading. I made the decision not to use flashbacks for Dakotashi, despite his rich and relevant backstory, for this reason. However, I’m thinking now that maybe they’ll work in this story.

I’ve always wanted Dakotashi’s history to be somewhat mysterious and vague. His story affects his emotions more than anything else. For Amber, one of my main characters in The Vern, her story not only affects her emotions, but the plot and her relationships with other characters. Anyway, I am at least considering using flashbacks for her.

In the meantime, I will continue to think about how to show all these scenes better. The Vern is going to require a lot of work, but maybe not as much scene moving/combining/rewriting as Dakotashi One. Wish me luck!

TV Addict

So now that most of the TV shows I watch have gone on hiatus and summer seasons haven’t started yet, I’ve gotten more actual editing done in the past few days than I have in weeks. I’ve been sporadically brainstorming and planning, but nothing consistent.

I have also subscribed to and started using this tool called AutoCrit, which so far I have found useful, if a bit overwhelming. I’ve looked at my first couple of chapters a lot, so later sections of my book are sure to have even more problems.

Anyway my lesson here is that I watch way too much TV. I’m much more productive when I don’t watch so much, which seems like a no-brainer, but I have a hard time resisting the shows I watch or a good Netflix binge.

History is Complex

So I know this is perhaps the most understated of all understatements of all time, but it’s a problem for me. My Dakotashi series started out as kind of an more nebulous alternate world that echoed our own, like Jacqueline Carey’s Kushiel’s Dart series. But then it morphed into something a little more based in our reality, but still with significant changes, especially for my alternate England (Breinnan) and alternate Japan (Kansa). So the whole world-building aspect has been a major roadblock for me.

Even simple things like—Do I call Shakespeare Shakespeare, or do I give him a different name?—cause rounds of debate with myself. I’ve already given him a slightly different background for his characters in Romeo and Juliet although the plot remains the same (I also renamed it as it no longer takes place in Italy–oh the ripples!). The monarchy, I’m thinking starting with Queen Elizabeth, is completely different. How much of the rest of politics and history stays the same? It’s times like these that I wish I had taken an English history course in college. I would have, but I think that professor was on sabbatical for part of the time, offered courses that weren’t the ones I wanted (which let’s face it would probably have focused on Queen Elizabeth; Young Bess was one of my favorite movies growing up), or were in conflict with other classes. Honestly, I don’t really remember. I just wish I had a better foundation beyond the numerous regency romance novels I’ve read.

Beyond the two main countries I’m focusing on, I think the rest of the world can remain basically the same, but it’s still a little overwhelming. So I’ve been avoiding doing anything about it. Well, that has to stop if I’m going to be able to continue with my revision for Book 2. In this book, Breinnan and Kansa (where the invaders were magically sent from hundreds of years ago) come into contact. In order to make the interactions with the delegation from Kansa have stakes and tension, I obviously need to know the motivations on both sides, which has a lot to do with what is going on elsewhere in the world.

So I read up on the period in my Complete Idiot’s Guide to World History and perused more details in Wikipedia. Stellar sources of information, I know. Still, it’s helping. I think. I haven’t nailed down exactly when my story takes place: during the early part of the French Revolution, the Reign of Terror or during the Napoleonic Wars, but at least I have a better overview of the timeline again. It’s been a long time since the general World History course I took in college.

I also read a little about the East India Trading Company, which could cause even more trouble for me. How would having a king of Asian descent affect trade in that part of the world? Would it matter? Would it be an advantage? I know even less about the history of Britain’s trading empire than I do the French Revolution/Napoleonic Wars.

I’m doing everything backwards! But the fact I’m thinking about all of this is a step in the right direction. Baby steps, people.

Revision Update: Camp NaNoWriMo

Camp-Participant-2015-Square-ButtonYes. I signed up for Camp NaNoWriMo. I got assigned randomly to a “cabin” and there is actually a person who lives in Japan. How cool is that?

It’s the first time I’ve tried the Camp version of NaNo. I’m treating it in the most flexible way possible since I’m in revision and brainstorming mode right now.  I’ve set myself a goal of 20,000 words for April. However, my main goal is to keep moving forward on my revision as well as planning for future books, so in my progress chart, I’m counting everything, including brainstorming & synopsis. When I don’t have words that I can count, I have a space in the chart to note other things like working on my revised scene outline or doing historical research.

I’m ahead of my meager daily word count goal (in comparison to my typical November goals) so far, but  the first week typically goes pretty smoothly for me. We’ll see how next week goes. Ideally, I’ll actually start on the rewriting part at some point and turn on the word count feature in Scrivener and get to 20,000 new words (which would be totally legit). If not, as long as I work consistently and my chart is full, I’ll consider myself a winner.

Revision Update: The Map

Last night I finished the map for my revision. Or I think I did. It took awhile.

Like I said in my last post, I identified some areas that I think I can improve in my book. Most of the problems stem from, even though I intentionally put in scenes that serve more than one purpose, much of my draft being single layered, as in only one thing happening at once. Part of that is because Dakotashi can be pretty single-minded. Part of it is also I don’t always see how things connect or how they can connect until the first draft is finished and lay it all out. Then it’s like fitting together and rearranging a puzzle.

This time I used Scapple, a kind of note board from the creators of Scrivener. You start with a blank “page” and then add notes that you can move around and connect with each other with dotted lines or arrows. You can change text and border color and even border shape. So for my revision map, I wrote a short descriptive name for each scene (which I’ve already done in Scrivener b/c I don’t divide into chapters until later in my process) and then I started adding stuff, moving things around and seeing what connected/seemed to work better. All while keeping in mind the goals I had identified for my revision.

Scapple Revision Map

Here is screenshot of the first couple of scenes. The rounded black borders are the original scenes. Green is new material in a current scene. Blue is combined and Blue with a jagged border is moved and combined. It turned out to be pretty linear (with offshoots). If you look at what I did while brainstorming before I wrote the book, you can see that one was really free form.

Scapple Character Web

Then, I wrote a synopsis based on the outline to see if I could get everything to fit and flow. I did have to refer to my draft some to remind me exactly what was going on is some scenes. I have thought of a couple of problems that will necessitate some further refinement, but I think what I have is workable.

Next Steps: Expanding on the details when I put everything back into Scrivener for a more detailed outline moving forward. I’ll probably do some nitty gritty character and relationship progression work as well. I will be trying to follow the Revision: Plan for Attack that I thought of a couple years ago, refining/changing as I see fit.

Revision Update: Brainstorming

Around watching a movie and tv today I spent most of the day brainstorming about my Dakotashi Book 2 revision. After reading over my first draft and trying to consider its problems, I decided the story needed more depth and for some of the conflict in the 2nd half to be moved up into the first half. So I’m thinking of some ways to move some things around, heighten others and add some also.

My problem now is trying to find the best way to map it all out in a way that I can see it all and make sense of what I’m changing and what is staying the same. Especially while I’m still brainstorming and figuring things out, this is very important so I don’t forget things and when I actually start the rewriting, I have a plan I can follow.

Wherever my revision goes, it’s still clear that my first draft is still a very rough first draft. I suspect if I ever want that to change I’ll have to stop writing so quickly over NaNoWriMo. But I’m not sure even if I took my time and wrote from an even more detailed outline, it would change the amount of work I’d have to do in revision. I discover so much of the story and characters while writing the first draft and probably more while revising.

Revision is when the story really takes shape.

My Journey with Dakotashi, Part III: Revision

Please see previous posts on Origins and NaNoWriMo.

My revision really started when I went to the Write Stuff conference in 2012. James Scott Bell was the pre-conference speaker and I’ve already written about how I found his book, Plot and Structure, to be enormously helpful so I won’t go into how his philosophies shaped my revision, even though they have. Instead I want to talk about three important tools and how they helped me: a voice journal, the synopsis and Scrivener as means to look at character relationships.  Continue reading My Journey with Dakotashi, Part III: Revision

Writer’s Retreat

Last week,  I took the opportunity of a new fiscal year and a fresh pot of vacation hours to go on a personal writing retreat. I found a place in an isolated little village in Vermont and did nothing but write, revise and research for five days. This was helped by a spotty internet connection and no cell service.I was able to finish the big rewrite of my book that I have been planning for over a year and made some other bigger revisions that I only thought of recently as well. This included a 40k-word section rewritten/revised. Of that, 16k words that were either new scenes or completely rewritten.

Continue reading Writer’s Retreat